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Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing?
Monday, August 30th, 2010
Let’s read the following 655 words
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Tail.
So my lucky coin has decided. Time to part with Cindy. About time, too, I am already getting bored with her.
Head.
Seem like Amy is the lucky girl tonight. Might as well get ready now to meet with my new girl. Cindy didn’t even pick the phone up when I call her. Some guy’s voice was answering me. I guess we finally think alike for once. Love is just a toss of a coin after all. Cindy got head not long ago. Now she got the tail, and so she is out of my life, like many girls before.
Another head.
Romantic boy tonight? Fine. A change of facade sometime is not bad at all. I should get some flowers for Amy. White roses are good. "For your pure and innocent beauty" would be the perfect line. Maybe I should reserve a spot at Joe’s restaurant now. He still owns me from the time I introduce him to that girl, what was her name again? Samantha, I think. That guy is fine with recycle goods.
Tail again.
Good. Sharing an umbrella with Amy under this rain fits my idea of romantic. She live only a few blocks away from here, after all, and Joe’s place is not that far from her house. I don’t like having my brand new suit getting wet though. Maybe I should get there fast before the rain gets harder.
Head this time. One more head. Last time…head.
Alright, I trust you, my lucky coin, so you better not getting me in trouble. If it is not for you, I would never pick this girl up into my house. Man, she looks like a highschooler. Did she run away from home? That would be the best explanation of why she lies unconscious in front of my house. Not good. It is never good to have a highschool girl in a 23-years-old guy’s house in the beginning. At the worst, I could have been labeled as a kidnapper and a pedophile. I should have let the police handle this…but there is no use complaining now when I already take her in. Maybe I will wait until she wakes up and then hand her to the police. You are not lucky tonight then, Amy. Don’t be angry with me when I tell you that. It is the coin’s fault.
Tail. Head. Tail. Tail. Head…
How long have I been making decisions of my life with this coin? And how many mistakes I will blame on it? Have I lie to myself too much recently? And why the hell I am thinking all of this? I should get myself busy instead of playing with the coin…That girl will need something to change into when she wakes up…Good thing Cindy is a forgetful woman. She still left her clothes here since the last time she moved in. Now she won’t need them anymore. I hope the girl won’t get any idea with the lingerie…
Head eh?
Yeah…It is the best choice after all. Getting mad at this girl won’t help me solve the situation at hand.She had just awakened, after all. I have to be mature like an adult. With a deep breath, I will turn back and try to reason with her in the most sincere caring voice I could fake out…
“You see, I am worried about you, so-”
“No”
I am amazed with my own self-restrain ability, trying not to slap her when she said that to me with such an attitude while I am trying to be nice to her. The heck with being an adult, this calls for some dramatic measures.
“Fine! I will just call the police and have them get you out of my sight.” She should understand the threat and leave peacefully.
“Then I will tell them that you kidnapped me and forced me to wear those horrible lingerie to have sex with you.”
Dear God, what have I got myself into?
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Now, can you guess:
1.The genre of the story?
2.What is going on?
3.What might happen next?
This story is an experiment with stream of consciousness writing. I apologize for the confusion it may cause.
Oh dear. Seem like my experimental writing is a failure.
Also, it is not finished, for those who didn’t figure it out.
Well, I guess experimental is experimental. I am trying out things I have not try before. Seem like I manage to confuse a whole lot of people with my fail definition of stream of consciousness writing.
@Glissade: Thanks, but no, really, I confuse people this way. XD
The actual story I want to tell is:
That player guy is a guy who use his lucky coin to decide on everything, and he had just use it to decided that he would dump his old girl for a new one. He was preparing to meet the new one, when he suddenly found out a girl in front of his house, unconscious. He was debating if he should call the police, or bring her inside first. The coin says the latter, so he did. He think a little about himself and how he use the coin for everything, even doing something such as bringing that girl in. Then he try to get rid of the thought by thinking about what the girl’s clothing which got wet since it was raining. He then think of his old girl’s clothes in the wardrobe, and that he would show the girl the wardrobe, which include the lingerie. Then he, logically, telling her to go home, which the girl keep saying no to. He tried to call police to get her home, and got the threat.
get rid of that "what" before "the girl’s" from the above.
Josh Alfred seem to got the genre. Although I doubt "Fiction Frivolousness" is an accepted genre, but it actually encapsulate the feeling I am trying to give the reader. But how did you got the criminal part Alfred? O-o It did went through my mind this can be a criminal fiction, but I don’t intend to.
And Aspen, your answer is not as confusing as my story. XD What you guess about what is going to happen is actually right (partially).
For those who worries: No, this abomination of a story won’t ever be publish. XD I am just trying out new way to write.
@Glissade:
My sincerest apology for the failure to explaining on my part. I did not try to defend an already failed writing, I just want to provide more clarity.
I do think that the player guy telling the highschool girl to go home is what the reader might expect from the guy, since he actually worry about she being in his house, because if the cops found out he might be arrested with the charges of kidnapping and being a pedophile. He does state that when he takes the girl in. There fore, he won’t even think of doing anything to her.
However, it seems like this connection is too far to be notice.
And of course, this thing is far from complete. The story will be write and rewrite until I can actually convey the story with clarity.
Thank you for your input.
Well, my first guess for genre would be "unedited". Except that’s not a genre. But yeah. You need to edit.
1. The genre so far is realistic fiction. Nothing has happened that would make it speculative (ie fantasy or sci fi), nothing has happened to count it as horror, nothing has happened to count it as romance, and it’s set in modern times as far as I can tell, so it isn’t historical. So it’s just realistic ficiton. If you’re going for something else, nobody will be able to tell until something actually happens.
2. A kindda skeevy guy prepares to go on a date with some chick. thankfully, the chick is spared from hearing his god awful pick up lines when the dude finds some little high school girl passed out in front of his house. He then either gave her the lingerie to put on or actual put her into it (either case, EW. Why couldn’t he just give her an old t-shirt of his and a pair of sweatpants???). She wakes up and (understandably) freaks out about some creepy dude taking her into his house and giving/dressing her in lingerie. He then for some reason (apparentyl because she said "no" with an attitude? Yeah, ok, guess she should just agree with everything you say then… Seriously, the guy almost slaps her because she WAKES UP IN A STRANGERS HOUSE AND SAYS NO? What kindda psycho is this guy?) threatens to call the cops which doesn’t EVEN make sense, since he brought her in the house in the first place, and then wonders what he got himself into when she fires back her own threat.
See, it isn’t that your story doesn’t make sense. It’s that it is just a nonsensical idea for a story.
3. What might happen next is you will go back through this piece and edit it so there aren’t so many gramatical errors as to make your english teacher cry. Then maybe you’ll try fixing the GAPING HOLES IN LOGIC that seem to be running rampant through your story.
Edit: In what way did your synopsis of what happened differ from mine? I left out the coin bit, because it was obvious. As for the "he logically told her to go home" bit… no he didn’t. He said "You see I am worried about you-" to which she replied "no!" Nowehere in there did it say anything about him asking her to go home. Don’t try to defend your story with arguments that don’t apply. Just fix the story.
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Do you think this CHARACTER is a GOOD EXAMPLE for TEENAGE girls ?
Friday, August 27th, 2010
Jamie Weston is a 22 year old french woman from Marseille ( her father is american and her mother french ). Although her young age, the mind of this very beautiful young woman seems so mature for her age. She’s a hard working girl for this reason, she runs a lingerie shop and is in the verge to open a tanning salon business.
About her behaviour, we could say she’s a shy girl. Because of this and as a result of seen and sometimes experiencied bad relationships between the two sexes, now she doesn’t want to have a boyfriend. And for this reason, she’s a single mother by choice although men, because she’s very gorgeous, go after her.
The joy of Jamie’s life is her son Alphonse. Alphonse is a 2 year old boy who was born naturally in Jamie’s small flat with the help of a homebirth midwife. Jamie, when it’s possible, takes her son to her shop to stay with him but sometimes she hires a nanny or her best friend takes care of Alphonse.
Jamie is a little religious but in her own way. She believes is important to respect everyone and to have ethics in life.
sounds ok, what’s the problem?
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What’s your opinion about this CHARACTER BEHAVIOUR ?
Monday, August 23rd, 2010
Jamie Weston is a 22 year old french woman from Marseille ( her father is american ). Although her young age, the mind of this very beautiful young woman seems so mature for her age. She’s a hard working girl for this reason, she runs a lingerie shop and is in the verge to open a tanning salon business.
About her behaviour, she’s a shy girl. Because of this reason and as a result of bad relationships with men, she doesn’t want to have a boyfriend and she’s a single mother by choice. Although men go after her.
The joy of Jamie’s life is her son Alphonse. Alphonse is a 2 year old boy who was born naturally in Jamie’s small flat with the help of a homebirth midwife. Jamie, when it’s possible, takes her son to her shop but sometimes she hires a nanny or her best friend takes care of Alphonse.
Jamie is a little religious but in her own way.
Aside from wondering how a shy twenty year old girl can have accumulated so many bad relationships with men that she chooses to be a single mother, she seems quite plausible. Perhaps she witnessed the bad relationships of others, without witnessing healthy relationships. Perhaps her parents had a healthy relationship but were separated from each other or from her.
I’m sure she is a good mother. She is tune with the bodily realities of life, and not opposed to sensual pleasures (the lingerie shop, the natural birth, the choice of a homebirth midwife, and the instinct not to date men when her own child is little. She’s very wise, instinctually. I imagine she is very intelligent and very intuitive when dealing with customers and vendors for her store.
I do have the awful feeling that she is going to be set upon by churchy neighbors who oppose her sales of beautiful lingerie during the Lenten season, have a chaotic love affair with Johnny Depp and end up with the mayor asleep in her display case wrapped in a beautiful silk dressing gown. If this is her fate, how well we can tolerate her will depend a great deal on her wardrobe, her physical beauty and that of her surroundings, and of course a little history and trivia about lingerie.
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