Comments for Just Knickers - and Lingerie http://justknickers.com Wicked Knickers and Luxury Lingerie Sat, 04 Sep 2010 21:26:16 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.5 Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Aspen http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14257 Aspen Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:52:39 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14257 Wow that was kind of confusing but here's what I think. The genre is realistic fiction Well there's this guy who's based all of his choices off of a lucky coin, which I'm guessing was lucky at one point, but lost it. Now he's gotten himself into a load of trouble because of the coins choices and I think he maybe broke up with Amy... or Cindy... or both because the coin told him to. Um... I don't know if he'll use the coin anymore for his choice with the highschooler, seeing as it failed him so many times. Maybe he'll use his own mind this time and make a decision. Sorry my answer is kind of confusing. Was I way off?<br><b>References : </b><br> Wow that was kind of confusing but here’s what I think.

The genre is realistic fiction

Well there’s this guy who’s based all of his choices off of a lucky coin, which I’m guessing was lucky at one point, but lost it. Now he’s gotten himself into a load of trouble because of the coins choices and I think he maybe broke up with Amy… or Cindy… or both because the coin told him to.

Um… I don’t know if he’ll use the coin anymore for his choice with the highschooler, seeing as it failed him so many times. Maybe he’ll use his own mind this time and make a decision.

Sorry my answer is kind of confusing. Was I way off?
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]]> Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Josh Alfred http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14256 Josh Alfred Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:52:36 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14256 Genre: Fictional Frivolousness. I don't think that is a common genre. Reminded me of Batman's arch enemy, two face, without superhero's. Also kind of sadistic, and may turn into a criminal fiction. What is going on? A person is basing their decisions on an obsession, flipping coins to determine what to do. What might happen next? Answered above.<br><b>References : </b><br> Genre: Fictional Frivolousness. I don’t think that is a common genre. Reminded me of Batman’s arch enemy, two face, without superhero’s. Also kind of sadistic, and may turn into a criminal fiction.

What is going on? A person is basing their decisions on an obsession, flipping coins to determine what to do.

What might happen next? Answered above.
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]]> Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Glissade http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14255 Glissade Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:43:54 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14255 Well, my first guess for genre would be "unedited". Except that's not a genre. But yeah. You need to edit. 1. The genre so far is realistic fiction. Nothing has happened that would make it speculative (ie fantasy or sci fi), nothing has happened to count it as horror, nothing has happened to count it as romance, and it's set in modern times as far as I can tell, so it isn't historical. So it's just realistic ficiton. If you're going for something else, nobody will be able to tell until something actually happens. 2. A kindda skeevy guy prepares to go on a date with some chick. thankfully, the chick is spared from hearing his god awful pick up lines when the dude finds some little high school girl passed out in front of his house. He then either gave her the lingerie to put on or actual put her into it (either case, EW. Why couldn't he just give her an old t-shirt of his and a pair of sweatpants???). She wakes up and (understandably) freaks out about some creepy dude taking her into his house and giving/dressing her in lingerie. He then for some reason (apparentyl because she said "no" with an attitude? Yeah, ok, guess she should just agree with everything you say then... Seriously, the guy almost slaps her because she WAKES UP IN A STRANGERS HOUSE AND SAYS NO? What kindda psycho is this guy?) threatens to call the cops which doesn't EVEN make sense, since he brought her in the house in the first place, and then wonders what he got himself into when she fires back her own threat. See, it isn't that your story doesn't make sense. It's that it is just a nonsensical idea for a story. 3. What might happen next is you will go back through this piece and edit it so there aren't so many gramatical errors as to make your english teacher cry. Then maybe you'll try fixing the GAPING HOLES IN LOGIC that seem to be running rampant through your story. Edit: In what way did your synopsis of what happened differ from mine? I left out the coin bit, because it was obvious. As for the "he logically told her to go home" bit... no he didn't. He said "You see I am worried about you-" to which she replied "no!" Nowehere in there did it say anything about him asking her to go home. Don't try to defend your story with arguments that don't apply. Just fix the story.<br><b>References : </b><br>Not confused. Just not a good story. Well, my first guess for genre would be "unedited". Except that’s not a genre. But yeah. You need to edit.

1. The genre so far is realistic fiction. Nothing has happened that would make it speculative (ie fantasy or sci fi), nothing has happened to count it as horror, nothing has happened to count it as romance, and it’s set in modern times as far as I can tell, so it isn’t historical. So it’s just realistic ficiton. If you’re going for something else, nobody will be able to tell until something actually happens.
2. A kindda skeevy guy prepares to go on a date with some chick. thankfully, the chick is spared from hearing his god awful pick up lines when the dude finds some little high school girl passed out in front of his house. He then either gave her the lingerie to put on or actual put her into it (either case, EW. Why couldn’t he just give her an old t-shirt of his and a pair of sweatpants???). She wakes up and (understandably) freaks out about some creepy dude taking her into his house and giving/dressing her in lingerie. He then for some reason (apparentyl because she said "no" with an attitude? Yeah, ok, guess she should just agree with everything you say then… Seriously, the guy almost slaps her because she WAKES UP IN A STRANGERS HOUSE AND SAYS NO? What kindda psycho is this guy?) threatens to call the cops which doesn’t EVEN make sense, since he brought her in the house in the first place, and then wonders what he got himself into when she fires back her own threat.
See, it isn’t that your story doesn’t make sense. It’s that it is just a nonsensical idea for a story.

3. What might happen next is you will go back through this piece and edit it so there aren’t so many gramatical errors as to make your english teacher cry. Then maybe you’ll try fixing the GAPING HOLES IN LOGIC that seem to be running rampant through your story.

Edit: In what way did your synopsis of what happened differ from mine? I left out the coin bit, because it was obvious. As for the "he logically told her to go home" bit… no he didn’t. He said "You see I am worried about you-" to which she replied "no!" Nowehere in there did it say anything about him asking her to go home. Don’t try to defend your story with arguments that don’t apply. Just fix the story.
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Not confused. Just not a good story.

]]> Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Tee R. Oll http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14254 Tee R. Oll Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:37:17 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14254 This story isn't stream of consciousness. Stream of consciousness writing, which really gained popularity through modernist writers like Virginia Woolf, is exhibited by its lack of things that break the text up, like, you know, commas, periods, and paragraphs. I'm guessing you're a young author, so keep trying!<br><b>References : </b><br>B.A in English This story isn’t stream of consciousness. Stream of consciousness writing, which really gained popularity through modernist writers like Virginia Woolf, is exhibited by its lack of things that break the text up, like, you know, commas, periods, and paragraphs. I’m guessing you’re a young author, so keep trying!
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]]> Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Courtney Lou http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14253 Courtney Lou Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:31:22 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14253 Whattttttttttttttttttt<br><b>References : </b><br> Whattttttttttttttttttt
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]]> Comment on Can you guess the genre of the story I am writing? by Hussein http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14252 Hussein Sun, 29 Aug 2010 04:29:40 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/can-you-guess-the-genre-of-the-story-i-am-writing#comment-14252 ??????<br><b>References : </b><br> ??????
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]]> Comment on French knickers or thongs for a big peachy bum :-/ Please honest nice answers, No jokers? by Daria Cortese http://justknickers.com/french-knickers/french-knickers-or-thongs-for-a-big-peachy-bum-please-honest-nice-answers-no-jokers#comment-14247 Daria Cortese Wed, 25 Aug 2010 01:44:38 +0000 http://justknickers.com/french-knickers/french-knickers-or-thongs-for-a-big-peachy-bum-please-honest-nice-answers-no-jokers#comment-14247 Honey, stop being embarrassed of your own body. If you're doing your best to stay healthy and in shape, your body will be beautiful no matter what your age, or size, or whatever. Men are usually far less critical of a woman's body than that woman is of herself, especially if the two are in a relationship. If you want to give yourself a nice confidence boost, consider picking up a sexy set of lingerie or some beautiful night gowns. Don't hide yer light under a basket, okay? Don't apologize for having a great butt! WORK IT! http://www.love-of-lingerie.com/night-gowns.html<br><b>References : </b><br> Honey, stop being embarrassed of your own body. If you’re doing your best to stay healthy and in shape, your body will be beautiful no matter what your age, or size, or whatever. Men are usually far less critical of a woman’s body than that woman is of herself, especially if the two are in a relationship.

If you want to give yourself a nice confidence boost, consider picking up a sexy set of lingerie or some beautiful night gowns. Don’t hide yer light under a basket, okay?

Don’t apologize for having a great butt! WORK IT!

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]]> Comment on Which colour dress do you prefer? by cuerocat http://justknickers.com/lingerie-in-the-uk/which-colour-dress-do-you-prefer#comment-14251 cuerocat Mon, 23 Aug 2010 21:16:00 +0000 http://justknickers.com/lingerie-in-the-uk/which-colour-dress-do-you-prefer#comment-14251 sorry i don,t like the dress at all...<br><b>References : </b><br> sorry i don,t like the dress at all…
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]]> Comment on Do you think this CHARACTER is a GOOD EXAMPLE for TEENAGE girls ? by Precious Gem http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/do-you-think-this-character-is-a-good-example-for-teenage-girls#comment-14237 Precious Gem Mon, 23 Aug 2010 18:06:32 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/do-you-think-this-character-is-a-good-example-for-teenage-girls#comment-14237 It could be but I would question the young mother by choice angle.I wouldn't want my daughter choosing this way of life.<br><b>References : </b><br> It could be but I would question the young mother by choice angle.I wouldn’t want my daughter choosing this way of life.
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]]> Comment on Do you think this CHARACTER is a GOOD EXAMPLE for TEENAGE girls ? by Hope http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/do-you-think-this-character-is-a-good-example-for-teenage-girls#comment-14236 Hope Mon, 23 Aug 2010 18:05:28 +0000 http://justknickers.com/mature-lingerie/do-you-think-this-character-is-a-good-example-for-teenage-girls#comment-14236 sounds ok, what's the problem?<br><b>References : </b><br> sounds ok, what’s the problem?
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